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Thursday, March 9, 2017

The Dream Giver poem

We are learning to write from clips.

The Dream Giver

He looks like a fly.
He sounds like a beezy bee .
He moves as a butterfly and as quickly a cheetah.

When he enters a room he has to be Quiet r

3 comments:

  1. Faka lofa lahi atu Hayley Sita here!
    You have added some describing words in this blog post but maybe next time you should write a little bit more so we can picture more of an person in our head. Other than that I like added how he moves and that he has to be quiet when goes into kids room. I have a question, is he big or small?
    Keep up the AWESOME work!

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  2. Kia ora Hayley
    Chloe here looking at this amazing blog post I think you have added a good discription because you have said how it moves and everthing to dicribe this.Maybe next time say what coulers they can be or if they can only be one couler.
    By for now

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  3. Kia ora Hayley.
    I like how you said we are learning to write from clips.
    Maybe next time you could re read it to see if it makes sense.
    Did you think of saying he is as quiet as a mouse?

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